“Accident”

It was raining the day they were to

shoot her scenes and Dirk just

shrugged the way he did and

studied the crossword.

It wasn’t a big part—the

wronged wife in a

merry-go-round of infidelity

amidst the upper-middle class.

The script was by Pinter and a

tad pretentious but it was

work and she didn’t want it

to go to waste, so she

found the oilskin and the

sou’wester and went without

shoes on the wet grass despite the

sparks’ cables snaking nearby.

She thought she might seem silly,

not thinking how erotic she looked—

a barefoot English rose in a

mackintosh, all wet.

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Comments

  • Mary McDonough Clark  On June 15, 2011 at 9:37 pm

    I like this very much!
    Vivid image, that barefoot in the wet grass.

  • RepressedSoul  On June 15, 2011 at 9:52 pm

    I think we were on similar wavelengths this evening 😉 Just posted a poem called barefoot. I love the way that you actually place us and set the scene. I’m not sure if it’s your editorial/producer eye that allows you to capture this detail. One crit point, sometimes poetry benefits from hinting rather than telling, what you leave to the imagination of the reader, like the suspensful cut off scene mid drama? Hoing that makes sense..like these lines:

    The script was by Pinter and a

    tad pretentious but it was

    work and she didn’t want it

    to go to waste, so she

    found the oilskin and the

    sou’wester and went without

    shoes on the wet grass despite the

    sparks’ cables snaking nearby.

    You’re telling us what’s happenning. Maybe some readers would prefer if she went out without a coat, or just ran into the rain to embrace it? It’s all in the eye of the reader though. Hope you don’t mind this lengthy comment lol!

  • jackiedick  On June 15, 2011 at 10:39 pm

    O, who cares what the reader “prefers” it’s your damn poem, isn’t it? Always like to hear what men think, producer/writer/poet/or just plain guy of what’s erotic…barefoot in the grass…okay. if that’s what you think, then it’s valid. More insight into your shooting experience. Thanks for sharing.

  • Tonya Ramey  On June 24, 2011 at 2:51 pm

    This is another one of your masterpieces… as readers sometimes we need to be led 🙂

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